i m new to this department.. and i very much suck at poetry..
i read my own poem.. and couldnt stop lolzing.. so i suggest you be well prepared with handkerchiefs and stuff.. just in case ;)
when the sun rises
a new hope arises
bringing you a day
full of surprises!
a new obstacle stumbles upon you
and you wonder, what to do
but hopes cometh & light it threw
you finish the journey without much ado
a new hope arises
bringing you a day
full of surprises!
a new obstacle stumbles upon you
and you wonder, what to do
but hopes cometh & light it threw
you finish the journey without much ado
satisfied with your day
you go to bed and lay
and before u say adieu to the day
to the almighty, you thank & pray
you go to bed and lay
and before u say adieu to the day
to the almighty, you thank & pray
well.. this was the best i could come up with for today
any suggestions to improve my poetry are welcome. :)
p.s: this poem was inspired by one of my friends who doesnt know how to rhyme.. LOLz
p.s: this poem was inspired by one of my friends who doesnt know how to rhyme.. LOLz
5 comments:
for starters, the lines rhyme...
that shd give ur frnd some complex..
even tho the rhyme scheme changes from the first pgh to the other two
still on the whole it's pretty cute...and the msg is both noble and clear...hmmmm....
keep goin dude
Appreciative!
well its really a good start and no doubt it rhyme so smooth...hehe
well atleast i made out som good skill out of u :P
and second i dnt always write rhyming poems...so u just cant simply blame me! grrrrrr
thanks for being so appreciative!
especially mEi.. i m overwhelmed.. LOL
will come up with a good poem soon.. and mEi.. this time i will cut ur nose for sure..:))
p.s: the poem hardly took 2 min of my time.. it just came in ma mind
Thats a nice poem..it has rhyme as well as reason..nice
hey! thanks sangeetha.
well it does seem to rhyme.. and think it imples somethin.
but this poem is premature.
i need to come up with poems conveying strong messages.. will strive for it. :)
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